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Return of the Jedi opening scene

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Darth Lightbulb
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This is just the opening scene to my upcoming Return of the Jedi campaign. Please note that this is probably not the way this scene will play out when I release the full campaign. Enjoy. Please review. And don't be afraid to be frank about it. I want to know what you really think.
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Darth Lightbulb
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OK. Please comment. The better version of this is coming out soon. So don't lose all hope if it seems like junk.
darth_noobo Great cini
a few things you could do in the full version:

*Change the Darth Vader, the constant moving of his head to show glowing red eyes was a ditraction. the Andrea Italy Darth Vader will suit for this.

* I don't know about everyone else, but the dialogue was too slow for me.

apart from that, It was good to watch
Darth Lightbulb
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Thanks. Yes, a lot of this scene has changed since I released this.( I put it up about a week ago.) And I did change the Darth Vader to Andrea Italy's Mod. There is a bit more eye-candy in the demo to come.

[Edited on 06/07/07 @ 09:30 AM]

Darth Lightbulb
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Does anybody else want to comment? -_-
hyperlion You want comments, you've got one.

You should have Darth Vader speaking in the first line (0) and the commander in the second line (1). The constant switching between red and green is annoying otherwise, and it'll look more like a conversation.

You could also add a few pauses and stuff into the speech, or split it up, like instead of
"But he asks the impossible I need more men"
you could say
"But he asks the impossible" then a few seconds later
" - I need more men."

The shuttle scene is too quick. Linger a bit on the opening shuttle, then use triggers to have the shuttle fly through the opening in the wall and land (remove, create) while scrolling the view. And have more stormtroopers.

Finally, you have a very regular ten-second pause between each speech line. Vary it a little, according to taste. Eg I'd have longer pauses (in general) before Vader speaks.
Good luck.

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